Grammar help needed!! time and numbers

[sherron0]

Numbers and time!
Hope I can get help quickly.  I'm trying to Beta a story with a bunch of time references.  She wants to write everything in numbers, which seems okay, (Seven forty-five, etc.) until you get to "Nine ten."   Here are the rules I've found so far.

Normally, spell out the time of day in text even with half and quarter hours. With o'clock, the number is always spelled out.
	Examples:	She gets up at four thirty before the baby wakes up. The baby wakes up at five o'clock in the morning.

Rule 13.	Use numerals with the time of day when exact times are being emphasized or when using A.M. or P.M.
	Examples:	Monib's flight leaves at 6:22 A.M. Please arrive by 12:30 sharp. She had a 7:00 P.M. deadline.

and she is emphasizing how slowly time is passing, and watching the clock.  So, I'm thinking, "9:10," except that The OWL says to stay consistent within passages. But. ?

Comments

[marag.livejournal.com]

If most of the references are exact times, I'd change all of it to numerals, because it looks funny otherwise. Yes, you *can* spell out some time references, but that doesn't mean you *should*.

So says the professional editor ;)

[sherron0.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much, ma'am. I know why she wants to use words, although it may be entirely unconscious. Her descriptions of what's happening are beautiful, and flowing? slowly, or something, and the numerals look jarring in the text. Or maybe she just doesn't know. I put WAY too much into doing the beta thing! I'm firmly in the camp of anything worth doing is worth overdoing.